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EDIT 22 Aug. 2010: Updating cleaner file and better text with corrected dialogue.
This is something that I got stuck in my head some time ago, and it demanded that I'd do something to it. This was just a test, probably a prologue to a story I'm considering to make. It is actually three pages long, I finished the last page just about an hour ago, but I still have to make the texts to the other two. Don't have enough time right now.
I really need to hear your opinion, people. I will upload the other two pages within the next week or so when I have enough time to do so. But for now I'd like to know what you think about the mixture of "realistic" style and painted/hieroglyph drawings and is it easy to follow.
I could really use comments on this one.
Oh, and tell me if you can spot any grammatical error. I'm not too good in writing stories in English.
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EDIT 22 Aug. 2010: Updating cleaner file and better text with corrected dialogue.
This is something that I got stuck in my head some time ago, and it demanded that I'd do something to it. This was just a test, probably a prologue to a story I'm considering to make. It is actually three pages long, I finished the last page just about an hour ago, but I still have to make the texts to the other two. Don't have enough time right now.
I really need to hear your opinion, people. I will upload the other two pages within the next week or so when I have enough time to do so. But for now I'd like to know what you think about the mixture of "realistic" style and painted/hieroglyph drawings and is it easy to follow.
I could really use comments on this one.
Oh, and tell me if you can spot any grammatical error. I'm not too good in writing stories in English.
Ive read this years ago (like 5 years ago I think) when it wasn't over 50 pages
Im soooo happy
*autoshot*
Read it since the first page and I have to say keep on!
You did say to point out any grammer errors
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