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Wurr page 144 by Paperiapina Wurr page 144 by Paperiapina
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Hey, it's about an hour into Monday around here, so I guess I made a new record of some sort. When was the last time you got the page of the week this early?!

Off to bed now. Tired. Brain sleeping already.

Wurr stuff me stuff.
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It's a good page overall, but it's not all that great. First of all, Crippled is looking upwards in the first panel, hinting that the bars are on the ceiling. The other panels make that vision unrealistic. Second, Crippled's face in the sixth panel appears pressed against the bars, but the bars blocking his face seem to have drawn from the shape of the head, and are confusing. In the seventh panel is the biggest issue. The volume, shading, and perspective on the wolf's face make it look like the muzzle should continue through the bars, but his face is blocked by something that should be behind it. The perspective also appears very off in that panel, because it also appears as if his muzzle is squashed. The perspective is the main issue. That wolf needs to back up or tilt his head. Finally, in the last panel, the voice of the wolf appears to be coming from behind a second set of bars quite a ways away. It would make more sense if the dialogue box was a circle and did not have an attempt at pointing towards the mouth. That's all, and good luck in the future!
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IncorporatedShadows Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Student Digital Artist
great page as always and The plot thickens! I have a question though, "what type of pens/pencils do you use on these pages?" :)
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Paperiapina Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks! Panel outlines are black Copic marker, lineart is Sakura Micron fineliners, large black areas are filled in with Pentel Brush Pen and the pencil shadings are done with cheap wooden pencils of HB hardness from local post office.
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IncorporatedShadows Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Ah, thanks! This will help a lot! :)
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GingaGirl86 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012
I'm excited to learn more about Naivel! :D
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PrinceofPride Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That wolf has a point. It's kind of funny how the dogs are paranoid that Crippled is a hellhound considering he probably wouldn't cause much harm to them.
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Pan-Zareta Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Wait'll they meet that "emaciated mutt's" friends. (Can't wait to see Surama kick tail)
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PandaTheAlchemist Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the way you drew Crippled's hand in the last panel. Hands are my personal nightmare.
However, I agree with Britannian-Tam about the perspective looking a bit off.
Aside from that, I love this comic :D
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cococookielover Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this comic so much, thanks for making it :)
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Bloodwolf-Xx Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it, hmmm sinister wolf. How dare he say that about poor crippled.
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Wolf-fang4 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
how discriminating regular dogs are to mutated dogs
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