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Again a second SURPRISEPAGEATTACK for the week! The speed is unbeliveable. Update from a friend's computer.

Anyway. I have a policy of not using other people's characters in Wurr (I can't pay you for using your characters, I want to keep Wurr as much my own as possible, so I wouldn't give you credit for it, and I'm not okay with not giving credit unless I have a written permission for it, plus I already have the plot ready and all so I couldn't give your characters any meaningful roles anyway. There have been two exceptions, but they were very, very special cases), but this page has a case of someone giving me a free idea, and me running with it. Rummur's character has been pretty much designed for couple of years, but some time ago a reader told me that it would be cool if I did "a german shepherd with eyes on his/her legs/paws/cantremember", or something along those lines. Now I can't use the breed, there are no real world dog breeds in the world of Wurr (no humans to breed them, and there is no such thing as "Germany" anyway to have a shepherd) the idea of eyes on legs was interesting, though. And I needed a way of identifying a bodyless leg. So, Rummur here was born with an eye on his leg. Of course an eye in such a place wouldn't have seeing nerves, so there wouldn't be any use for it. Also there are no eye sockets on arm bones, so the poor eyeball has been squeezed against radius and ulna (I hope I remembered the English words right...) with no support and no protection against damage. He had the thing removed when he was young, leaving an empty hole in his skin collecting dirt. And there is absolutely no way I could ever wish to show all this in the comic itself, so here, have a dump of absolutely useless info you'll never need anywhere, and possibly didn't even want to know.

Wurr stuff me stuff.
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Firstly, no single page of Wurr can be given critique, only the whole thing. So, this is for the entire Wurr project.

Firstly, I haven't simply spammed the stars like most. I rarely give full ratings when I critique something, but this does demand it. This comic is one the only one I've come across on dA that has a wonderfully polished and professional feel. The anatomy is fantastic, the drawings are clear, clean and crisp, and combined with good character development, I can simply sit down and enjoy reading this.

None of the following come up in Wurr. Bad anatomy. Messy drawing. Clunky dialogue. Too much text. Sparkledogs. Lack of detail.

I like how Hellhounds are the exact opposite of sparkledogs, and that neither the dogs nor the Hellhounds are morally superior.

The sense of "world" is done well, as you get information about the places, and culture as you read, and not in clunky text blocks or panels that serve as a graphic equivalent to exposition. The writer's mantra, "Show, not tell" rings true here, because you show us the world, making it feel smooth and natural. I'm also rarely reminded that English is not your native language, and while that's a credit to you, there are one or two places where it does show. But this can be easily fixed.

My only reservation I might have about this is plot. In the space between meeting Azrabak and leaving the crater, I was starting to fear the project might be running out of steam. But it isn't. Though the immediate impetus of leaving the crater does fade once they escape, the arrival of Azrabak simply moves the plot further from just being about Hellhounds and their domestic woes to a much wider conspiracy.

Finally, I'll say that what makes the experience better is how quickly Wurr updates. You work hard, and it shows. Keep up the great work.


I close with these words: when can I buy this, and for how much?
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First of all, your skill with pencil shading and coloring is AMAZING.
All your characters are beautiful and unique, I love them all. I love the way you give them dexterous paws and the big dog' (i forget his name XD) accent!
The guts in panel 4 look great! I know that sounds weird, but they do XD I love the way you added flies over the body, it makes it so much more believable. The backgrounds are a little minimal, but I can understand that, and it gives your comic a unique style!
Great job, and keep the pages coming! :D
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:icondarkcaninepinkielove:
I love how you go so in-depth about how his eye doesn't work as it has no muscle supporting it, and same goes with Morri and his family, but then one guy has eyes on his tongue and it works perfectly fine, eyelids and all. 
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FallingAngel13 Featured By Owner May 15, 2015
are you going to do a flash back/memory of Iacar and Nightclaw?
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clariktheking Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
have you ever thought about a hound that stood on two legs because of legs growing out of his legs giving him leverage and possibly being 12 feet tall
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x0Wolf0x Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
omg thats so sad what's happend to Rummar.... I never knew him.. because he wasn't in the story before... but it's sad
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Springheart16 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Only one little thing, this time! In the third panel, I'd take out in: they're still technically outside, and so the area he's referring to would not have a real 'inside".
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Leoyun Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
he remembers that leg.
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LoveAnimalsForever Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
Double ouch.............. :ohnoes:
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TzikiiWolf Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Student Filmographer
awww no! :( gonna read the next page right now! This one is great! XD
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Emolove1237 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
awesome! can't wait what happens next. i love ur art style
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maccarta Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011
I do hope this gets published. If it hasn't already and I somehow don't yet know about it XD
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Nuuhku87 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011
Me likes this kind of suprise pages. This story is getting more and more thrilling. I wanna know what happens next!!! :excited:
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Devildart Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i wonder where that hind leg went i cant be the only one wondering this
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AnimeWolf13 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Student Digital Artist
awwwww!! Poor Issan! he has lost a friend :(
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Pan-Zareta Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
lots of nice, grisly details.
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jannachii Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
AGAIN! AMAZING! Thought don't you think you should put a warning for gore?
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:iconfirewolf-anime:
Firewolf-Anime Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Don't worry, he always looks like that ;P Lol!
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K9battlecry Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Student General Artist
Yep you got the names of the bones right ^^
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Nightskyforlife Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
This story is utterly amazing!! I must have the whole thing in a day and I am so hooked!! I think you could really do something with this! Have you ever thought about that? Well any way keep going I cant wait to read more!!
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Natealia Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011
nice, I love it. Also I love your new icon! :D
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ValonNiles Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011   Artist
AMAZING!
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Giesey Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011
Who gets drawn the least? I must fanart. Now. *grabs pencil*
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Weretoons101 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:nuu: :nuu: :nuu: :nuu: :nuu: :nuu: :nuu:
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Punkkis-chan Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist
"Hey, I think I know that leg."

Kuulostipa jotenkin huvittavalta. XD
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ArcticLoneWolf Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Well I for one always appreciate background info on characters ^_^
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awsmdragonqueen Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
Is Rummer related to the guy in the very bottom right who looks upset? (wurr fail that I don't know his name :P )
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LamokRainbowscale Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist
Not a good sign.
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BoundertheWolf Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
Ouch, poor guy.. gotta be rough finding one of your own like that.
Another great page, keep up the good work.
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fruitbatslyra Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oof...whatever went down here was brutal, man.
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:iconfurballofthefullmoon:
furballofthefullmoon Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Oh my... who... who would do that??? I think the wurr pack might be in danger... be careful, guys!
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ScarsAndStories Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Cool new icon. NASTY ewww poor dude
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Deathcomes4u Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Professional General Artist
See this is what happens when you lose internet. You get productive. :XD: Happens to me too.
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Paperiapina Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Student General Artist
It sure does! And it helps to have a buddy who also draws a comic, and we're both reaching exciting bits in our respective stories. Bring in the motivation and hype!
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Deathcomes4u Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Professional General Artist
haaaaaaaa yes. Motivation writing buddy is something I lack though D: Well... for original stuff anyway, for fanfiction, that's another story :XD:
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Doan04 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
Just added you to my watch list. need to see what happens next. :)
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wolfxgrrl Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Student Photographer
oh no D:
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redchicken888 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
YOUR ICON IS SO KYUUTEEEE!!! :giggle: :blowkiss:
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wolfxgrrl Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Student Photographer
thanks :3
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redchicken888 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No prob :D:D:D:D
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stockstouse Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
I'm repulsed!
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General-EbonRose Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Something about this page really bothers me. I think it's something to do with the pacing maybe? Seeing them start looking, then bam! body, then bam! "we found Rummar" I just... started laughing. It was just so ridiculous.

Maybe if the last two panels were reversed, that way the body would be last to give more of an impact, instead us us looking at (issan?) ridiculous distraught expression and goofy hands.

Anyway, dunno how good the advice is, but the page did make me laugh instead of feel bad - and I know I'm supposed to feel bad, but... Just my observations and guess as to why.
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KyaTheWolf Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
Well i'm sure it took a while to find Rummar :/ WolfPearl probably didnt want to draw something so simple like them looking for the body, of course they would do that, its pointless to draw that. Plus it would make the comic drag a little.
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General-EbonRose Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Oh, yes I agree. I'm sure it did take awhile, but that's not how it seems reading it. Adding another panel of them searching isn't the only way to deal with handle a pacing issue in a comic. Altering panel size can affect it as well.

I don't feel like protracting the search would have made the comic drag at all, but that's just my opinion. However, I didn't suggest WolfPearl do that, I just think the timing is off, and one easy way to fix that would be to reverse the last two panels. Of course, I don't know that my suggestion would help at all. I'm not a comic guru.

All I know is how I felt while reading it. And to me, it felt off. So off, in fact, it ruined the whole mood of the scene.
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KyaTheWolf Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
Yeah I agree that the last 2 panels could be switched :) and I see what you mean ^^
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FablePaint Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Professional Filmographer
BBQ tonight! Bring the chili and beans!
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Paperiapina Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Student General Artist
Anyone has ketchup?
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Viergacht Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Professional General Artist
Ugh, poor hound. Looks like he didn't die easily.
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:iconpaperiapina:
Paperiapina Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Student General Artist
Yeah, I've seen how wild dogs hunt. It's not a pretty sight.
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Viergacht Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Professional General Artist
No indeed. I used to work for a breeder, and once the dogs got ahold of one of our ducks. It looked like it had gone through a woodchipper, poor thing.
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Gunslinger-of-Hearts Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Student General Artist
Oh my... /:-(
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PrinceofPride Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This comic just keeps getting more and more interesting.
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